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 Post subject: FIXED: Typos/grammar Ella in Cairhien
PostPosted: March 13th, 2010, 10:23 am 
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* HP:Healthy SP:Bursting MV:Full > l ella
A short, slender girls hurries on to an empty table that yet to be cleared and
then to the next making sure every available seat is open for taking for any
customer that enters the inn for a rest. Her hair is kept neatly in place, but
marks of dark line her cheeks telling you she has been at work at day.

Ella has a few scratches.

Ella is using:
<worn on head> a green knit scarf
<worn on body> a soft gray dress
<worn around wrist> a long-stemmed crimson rose
<wielded> a dagger of gleaming steel
<worn on feet> a pair of soft, light shoes



Perhaps ought to read:

A short, slender girl hurries on to an empty table, that has yet to be cleared and then to the next, making sure every available seat is open for the taking by any customer that enters the inn for a rest. Her hair is kept neatly in place, but marks of dark, line her cheeks, telling you she has been at work all day.

edit: Tried to bold the punctuation, but it's not too bold.


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